The Story That Never Ends

*wishes sooooooo much she had time to re-read this whole thing*

Well, finally!! :P I tried to play a little off of Jimmy's description of Lady Makennah, but I don't know…

Sir Doran Background:
Sir Doran was the second son of the forester at Ambrest and later followed in his father’s career after many years of working alongside him. He loved spending hours on horseback riding through the forests. He loved to just watch the forest animals and he became well acquainted with many of their ways. Actually, sir Doran just loved his line of work and all the duties it entailed. Loved it, that is, until the treacherous conquest of Ambrest so cruelly perpetrated by the Council through the tender affections of Lady Makennah, daughter of one of Sir Doran’s best friends. Lady Makenna’s father was slain by the counsel, and she, Sir Doran, and several others, still faithful to their king, barely escaped from Ambrest with their lives. A while after, when the king was forced to leave his throne, Sir Doran was among the first to officially join in the king’s cause.

Struggle: Shyness, difficulty in trusting people, bitterness toward the counsel for their treatment of his friends, and temptation to keep to himself and not stand up for what’s right.

Special Characteristics: Average height with dark, but greying hair. Keen vision and famous for vigilance. An astute listener, but generally quiet and talks almost slowly. Has deep and solid faith, and is very humble.

Wow! That's awesome! Great job, Emily!

@Emily - Nice job!
@jimmy - Who do we have left?

1: Don't let this thread die!
2: Don't ask me to help because I don't have enough imagination for this sort of thing.
3:

Haha! It HAS been awhile. I have been pretty busy lately, so I haven't read the story in a long time, but I am up for taking a look at this again. :)

Whew…. at least someone's still going to try to work on here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

1: Don't let this thread die! -2: Don't ask me to help because I don't have enough imagination for this sort of thing.- 3:

Changed my mind. Tell me who's left and I'll try. If I didn't do to bad, YEAH!!! If i did really bad well, i did really bad.

This was the list Jimmy posted back on page 82. I think there are a couple more characters that have been finished, but haven't been crossed off yet… Have you read some of the other backgrounds?

Just for y'alls assistance, here is a list of living named characters and where they are currently (this is at different times though, because the addition I just added would take place several hours after whatever happens next in the castle of Carivia). *The Order (All the good guys)* Rowan (Ronan): Heading North to confront Lord Traius. :) Kathryn: Heading South to meet the King. William: Heading South to meet the king. Lady Arwen (Ariana): Heading South to meet the king. Baron DuBatz: Heading South to meet the King. Sir Elviron: Heading South to meet the king. Count of Terema: He is heading toward the South. Remember in your posts that he has a broken leg (so don't make him do any ninja-like moves. :) ). Britton: Within the inner entrance to the castle of Carivia. He is alive* (see end), though desperately wounded. Evron: Possibly dead (we can decide later). He is just inside the gateway to the inner part of the Castle of Carivia. He just crossed the gauntlet of the Courtyard, when the catapult struck the party. Sir Desmond: Heading South to meet the king (Remember, he, Lady Makennah, and 26 other nobles escaped the cave and are heading towards the South). Lady Makennah: Heading toward the South. *We should probably do one more post or so that has these guys in it* Sir Walter: Heading toward the South. King Archen: Heading South. *This story needs to be explained. Apparently, Sir Walter was captured. We do not need necessarily to resolve this (a.k.a. rescue Sir Walter, as that could provide a good opening sequence for the sequel or something. I think we should re-tell the run-in with the Council from King Archen's perspective, though.* Band of the Order upon the Hill: These are the nobles who fought Lord Arsoth. I assume they were defeated and are in retreat. The question remains as to where exactly and who exactly they are now. *THIS REALLY NEEDS TO BE EXPLAINED! What happened and why? Anyone who likes to write about battles could tell this.Just have Lord Arsoth say it at some point, or have it written in a letter, or anything. It would help close an important hole.* *The Council (and the bad guys who follow it)* The Count of Omb (And Lords Saxon, Rolkran, Telrond, and two other Lords whose names escape me): At Omb for the time being. Lord Arsoth: He is still at the hill where the battle with the Order had taken place: Most likely, they came out victorious. Lord Melkior: Just stumbled accidently into Lord Arsoth's line of defenses. He will soon be brought to meet his sudden rival. Sir Denvoir: Within the Castle of Carivia. He has just rescued Britton (though he thinks him dead), and is setting out to capture Lord Traius and the Castle. *This is an important sub-plot that would be helpful to resolve. Melkior is vying for power against the Count of Omb, and knows that he needs to kill Lord Arsoth to avoid being killed himself. Fascinating. :)* *Lord Traius (because he is neither the Council nor the Order)* : Still in the castle of Carivia. Trying desperately to hold the wall and prevent Sir Denvoir's forces from taking it. He is probably beyond tired by this time. There are a couple characters who might become important later (*Isaac and Asher, for instance (if you remember them from the dungeons*)), but I tried to post all the characters who are still important to the plot right now. Also, if you notice, there are a lot of characters going South. :) We either need to end the fight at the castle and skip to a time when they are all in the South (and thus move to the next part of the story), or else have some (perhaps Ronan) leave the southern-bound parties and head to confront Lord Traius. I hope this helps you all! :) * He could be dead. I leave that to you. :) - - - - - - - - Checklist of Character backgrounds: *Good guys* Rowan (Ronan) Kathryn - I think Annalysa is going to do this. William Lady Arwen (Ariana) -Baron DuBatz- -Sir Elviron- -Count of Terema- Britton - I think Annalysa is going to do this. Evron Gradlem Sir Desmond -Lady Makennah- Sir Walter King Archen -Duke of Assen- Sir Quinn Sir Doran -Sir Caston- Aroka (you might not remember him, as he was added in the editing process. He is a charcoal burner who was part of King Archen's Council in chapter 6.) *The Council (and the bad guys who follow it)* -The Count of Omb- Lord Traius -Lord Drakin- Lord Rolkran Lord Telrond Lord Arsoth -Lord Melkior- -Sir Denvoir- -Sir Myles- *unknown* Isaac and Asher

Whoah, so you are suggesting to help finish the story? If so, that is awesome! I am a week or two away from summer break, and I know I will definitely be willing to help out once I get home, or before, if I have time. :)

Have you read the entire story through recently? The many threads are a bit hard to follow (that is something we will probably have to address at some point), so it is hard to do anything with the story unless you have a good grasp about what is going on. I know, for my own part, that I will have to read it all again before I will be able to add (that shouldn't take too long, but it is a necessary step). :)

It will be so amazing when this story is done. It is all downhill once we reach the editing process, and it will just be a good story. Thanks to over a dozen people, it already is. :)

EDIT: Thanks, Emily, for posting that info. :) It is really helpful.

I might have an idea for Rowan, if he's the prince.
Is he? I forgot.

He is, though he isn't 100% sure that he is. He was told it, but he doesn't necessarily believe it. What is your idea? That is, unless you want to write the addition and we can find out. :)

I've got an idea. This is way ahead of where we are in the story, but i was thinking that maybe we could have Rowan meet his father (King Archen) at the very end of the story.

Hey! Sorry I haven't been active here. I'ts been a crazy life! :) But a good one. I had Kathryn's background done but I can't find it anymore so I'll have to re-do it. I'll try to get it done within the next few years lol :D

Welcome back to the forums BBJ14!

I haven't done anything with this story at all, but I would love to help! I read most of it, but I will go back and read the rest of it.

Hey! Sorry I haven't been active here. I'ts been a crazy life! :) But a good one. I had Kathryn's background done but I can't find it anymore so I'll have to re-do it. I'll try to get it done within the next few years lol :D

Haha! Good to see you back on the forums! :)

Hey! Sorry I haven't been active here. I'ts been a crazy life! :) But a good one. I had Kathryn's background done but I can't find it anymore so I'll have to re-do it. I'll try to get it done within the next few years lol :D

next few years!!!!!! we'll already have finished the story by then!!!

^JK^

(I am about to be done reading this and I think it has great potential! We should try to finish it and start a new one! When I am finished reading it I will try to think of an idea for the start of the next chapter.)

(Guys! I don't know if anyone has done this already or not, but I copied and pasted all the backgrounds onto a Google doc so they'd all be in one place and I could find them easily. Here is the link if anyone else thinks that is helpful :P And I copied Jimmy's list of people we have left at the end (a more updated one than what I reposted at the top of this page…oops! :P)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1U7bQKGm9HCaphsnN62_iVMeZlOaoCBAId7G50IwYdAw/edit .)

(1 this is going to be a book right?
2 if it is, are we going to put in the front of the book the descriptions of everyone or are we instead going to put them after we introduce the characters?)

1. I think they should be in the back as an index.

(The main point of the descriptions was to add more depth to some of the characters, so we'd take some of the background info, struggles, etc from the descriptions people wrote, and edit it into the story ;D I'm not sure if they decided about putting the whole descriptions in anywhere, but it has been talked about.)

(This might be a little too out there…but I was reading through the description for Baron DuBatz and came up with this idea for Lord Telrond…)

Lord Telrond
Background: The younger brother of Baron DuBatz, Telrond had ardently rejected the Faith his brother so openly embraced. Telrond outwardly despised his brother, but deep in his heart was a feeling, much suppressed, denied, and tainted, but nevertheless a feeling of admiration and respect for a man who had given up wealth and prestige to follow what was right. DuBatz was hunted as a criminal, considered a traitor by some, but he was a man of honour and integrity. He had given up a life of ease and comfort for a greater and higher calling. His mortal life was in constant danger, but his eternal soul was hid with Christ. When Telrond looked at his brother, he saw a man he could not but respect; when he looked at himself, he was sickened by what he had become.
Telrond had always been impetuous, rash, and feeling-driven, seeking honour, money and men’s applause, so when he was bribed to join the insurrection after his brother’s continuous refusal, he was all too happy to join. After that, he had sunk to lower depths. His soul was hardened by the acts of cruelty and depravity performed by his fellow Lords. He knew that he was being pulled down, but alas, he never tried to stop himself, but went almost willingly. The mixed feelings of disgust and secret admiration confused him, tormented him, and resulted in him giving himself further to evil to try to escape from his thoughts. He knew full well that decisions he made would seriously affect his brother and could even result in his death, and outwardly he rejoiced in it, giving way to passionate outbursts of fervent condemnation of the Order, optimistic views of a future controlled by the counsel, and gross adulation of the Count of Omb.

Struggle: The double life he is living, self-disgust and horror at the evil thing he has become but loving it as well, the secret respect he holds for his brother, the fear of the counsel if they ever knew his true thoughts or if he ever wanted to stop his downward-spiral, giving way to passion, selfishness, and self-aggrandizing.

Special Characterisitics: As much as the Barron DuBatz was very tall, Lord Telrond was very small in stature, although he had his brother’s scrawniness and small nose. His deep, strong voice almost seemed peculiar, coming from someone so relatively small. Although he never spent much time practicing arms, he was fairly good using a dagger, and he had remarkable aim when it came to throwing knives.

Hey guys… I really, really, really like this story. xD And I've been reading it from the beginning and wishing that I had the time to put into it. This summer looks as though it will be fairly relaxed for me for the first time in I can't remember how long! So I want to read through the whole thing sometime soon, and once I do, I might be persuaded to help out with the editing, which seems to be my strength when it comes to writing. ;)

That's awesome. xD ^We'll also expect you to write the score for the video version. :PPP jk^

I need to read it from the beginning!

That's awesome. xD ^We'll also expect you to write the score for the video version. :PPP jk^

That, I'll definitely be willing to do! If and when it ever happens! xD

That's awesome. xD ^We'll also expect you to write the score for the video version. :PPP jk^

_That_, I'll definitely be willing to do! If and when it ever happens! xD

Oooooo. That sounds awesome! xD

And who's the filmmaker? :P

And who's the filmmaker? :P

Noah?? xP

Ooooh, that would be cool. :P

Wow! I am glad you guys like the story. I am definitely going to do my best to help add to and hopefully reach the end sometime this summer. That would be quite fun. And again, as this is a collaborative thread, feel free to just pop in and say, "here's an addition" and we'll see what we can do to incorporate it and make it match the overall writing style of the story. :)

Also, GREAT background, Emily! That is definitely one of our most interesting yet. The thing to do now, when we get to the editing process, is to make sure these interesting things be put into the characters themselves. It will look really cool when it is done. :D

I am definitely excited to see how this turns out after editing and with more character depth. :D

That's awesome. xD ^We'll also expect you to write the score for the video version. :PPP jk^

I hate to throw cold water on the idea but a film with the number of characters this story has would take the plural of a miracle.

If we are going to try it may i suggest a series of short movies (kinda like what tv shows used to be) that can be written to accommodate the weather, cast members available, set/landscape options, chocolate and or chimichangas of a particular day.

Haha "a plural of miracles"… :)

Sorry I haven't been more involved - it's been quite busy over here and my mom is expecting in June so we're planning for that and I'm trying to get school all finished up this week…

That's awesome. xD ^We'll also expect you to write the score for the video version. :PPP jk^

I hate to throw cold water on the idea but a film with the number of characters this story has would take the plural of a miracle. If we are going to try it may i suggest a series of short movies (kinda like what tv shows used to be) that can be written to accommodate the weather, cast members available, set/landscape options, chocolate and or chimichangas of a particular day.

(xD I was joking about making a video, but that would definitely be fun to do short tv episode type things, and make it logistically ^is that the word…^ a lot easier. :P:)

At the least, it would make an interesting radio drama. ;)

Now that ^ is something I can see happening. :)

I have been reading it and there is a lot of editing needed (I am not very good at that but there were a few simple things I edited) but overall it is an amazing story/book??

At the least, it would make an interesting radio drama. ;)

That would be so cool! :D

(Hey guys! Here are the descriptions I promised. *Lady Arwen* Background: Lady Arwen comes from the village of Anandale, in the south of the Kolgarriat Mountains. She was raised by her mother, who was invalid (her father had died when she was two). Her mother's incurable sickness led her to seek ability as a healer and user of medicines. Though she was never an incredible physician, she had a compassionate heart that helped comfort those whom she tried to help. She is, at the time of the story, around 25 years of age, but during her early teen years, she had known Lord Traius very well. She knew that he had bad tendencies, but her lack of other friends drew her to him in spite of his faults. They had once hoped to marry, but Lord Traius joined the Count of Omb and Lord Drakin (seven years before the story begins) and so she finally decided to end her friendship. She knows what he is capable of, and as a result of her closeness with Lord Traius has a unique and powerful perspective of the enemy, the Council. She also knew Sir Doran from earlier days, and through him came to the Order. Her knowledge of the enemy and the deep respect King Archen has for her led her to hold a high position in the order, though she never learned to use any weapons with a blade. Struggle: Fear of failure (her failure to prevent Lord Traius' turn leads her sometimes to believe that evil will eventually triumph in spite of their efforts; often fights the desire to flee). Special Characteristics: Knows virtually no weaponry (though she can, at a pinch, shoot a bow (not necessarily very well)). Has almost violet colored eyes. Loves the color red. Can juggle (though she keeps that talent very secret). ;)

(Maybe we could use her juggling to help her escape (if she gets captured). just an idea)

(Could someone please post the entire edited story?)

I believe that the edited story is on page 86 or something like that. For y'all's convenience, though, I will post it again here if you want? :)

Whoa! Never saw that one coming! :)

I thought she was a good archer though….other than that, it's great! :)

Haha! Having Arwen juggle to escape would be awesome, and hilarious. :D

Jimmy made that description, not me.
The idea that she could juggle to escape was mine, though.

(By entirely edited I mean having the names changed.
(With all the other edit(ation?!)s of course))

(Quotes Liberty's Kids
"I will if somebody else will. Heck, I can't win this war(write this story) by myself."
might not be perfect)

(what victim is up next. WHOOPS I MEANT WHICH CUT IS UP NEXT!)

It's awesome that you are so enthusiastic! :) Hold on for a moment and I will try to post the full edited story (though the names still need to be changed, and the "editing" has only gone to around chapter 5 and just represents a second draft).