"What do you think of this?" - A Constructive Criticism thread...

Oh okay…still, great job!

@Madi: Thanks!
@Rachel: I got the results over phone…. but If we get anything at state, it will be announced and featured at ortl.org (Oregon Right to Life)

Yeah…actually, one of my friends knows a girl who knows her, I think, and I saw her like a post, and I was like, "I know who that is…" :)

haha! Bethany's a google + fanatic! j/k

Really she is!!!

Takes one to know one:) seems like she has at least one committed follower:)

Who??? Hannah or Evan?!?!?! J/K

Evan:) of course:):):)

haha, yeah, Google+ is fun, especially if you can see random pictures of people in harp cases. :D

Hannah, you're the only picture on this page without sunglasses on…quick, change your pic!!!!!!!! :P

?????????

Evan…. trust me… I know!!!!!! ;P

Ok, so to get back on topic, I'd like some constructive criticism on this flyer I've made for a dog walking business I'm starting! Do you think that people will take me up on this or not?

Triple E Dog Walking Service!!

Are you tired of walking your dog every day? Do you wish you had more time to yourself? Are you too busy all day, at the office, or even at home, to walk your dog?
If you are interested in having your dog walked, and don't know how to find someone to take care of your dog, my Triple E Dog Walking Service could be just what you've been looking for!

I've had experience with dogs for over 12 years, so you can know that your dog will be in good hands. A daily Dog Walk will cost you only $8 and it will give your dog and I the exercise we need to stay happy and healthy. Prior to scheduling your first walk, I would like to go on a short walk with you and your dog to get better acquainted with you, and your dog's needs.

I live in your neighborhood so I can conveniently walk your dog. Plus you can schedule your dog for walks anytime: mornings, mid-day, evenings, and on weekends. So, If you are interested in my Triple E Dog Walking Services, please give me a call at 503-939-8774. I look forward to meeting you and your dog, in the near future!

Nice!! I'd even let you keep my dog. :P Wow…you're going to be in good shape!! ;) Do you live near the Strangs?

Great Elanee! ;P I also came up with a quote for TEM… it's great!

Madi… the Smythe's are my second famiy… that's how well we know them! ;)

I know…you just seem to do a lot of stuff with them, so I was wondering if you lived really close?

We don't live close enough! About 45 min away! :(

Oh wow…that is far. :(

Yeah!!!! It really seems like a 100 miles! ;P

But not on days like today:)

Huh>???????? what's today?!

We came over for Ballet :):):):) ( that was last week)
I LOVE your expanded profile picture:) I'm sure you will have to explain things to certain people though:)

The expanded picture… um… well… I don't think I should say it.

Same here, I think I know what your thinking, but just to be sure, you can tell me in person:)

Ok, since everybody was crazy with the sunglasses… lol I decided to join the club :) I took it on my computer, so it's not that good…but hey :)

Lol :) I thought that was kinda over?? :) lol jk! :) #so7daysago! Lol jk!!!!! :)

Haha, yeah it was, but I haven't been on here forever, and finally I decided to get a stupid picture on here lol

Lol :)

What do y'all think of this? Honest opinions please. =)

On January 30, 2014, at about 2:00 AM, nine members of one household crossed the threshold from this life into eternity. That night one of their baseboard heaters started a tragic house fire which was to change their entire lives. The dad, Chad Watson, and his eleven year old daughter, Kylie Watson, survived. But their lives will never be the same. Their whole family is gone…never again to be seen in this life. How does one go on when something this tragic happens to them?

Their funeral was on February 8th which I and a few of my family members attended. On that stage were nine caskets each containing a body of that family who had gone before us into eternity. Outside sat the nine hearses waiting to carry each of those caskets to the grave. And there was the grave…one large grave to hold all their bodies.

My heart was breaking…these were my friends. They were ones I talked with, played games with, laughed with. And now, what now? I would never see them again in this life. They were gone…I must go on without them. And their family must go on without them.

Losing a loved one is a very hard thing. We are overcome with sorrow and also with many questions; why did God take them from us? Why did I have to lose them? But though it is a hard thing we can learn some many lessons from it.

"Death is not a period in life but a comma" ^1^ . Death is not the ending…it is just a change of location. The question is…which location will you go to after your death.

Were they ready for eternity? Am I ready for eternity? Are you ready for eternity? Each of us has only one life in which to prepare for death and eternity. This life is so short; just a handspan in light of eternity. Yet, this life is of infinite value for each one us. We are given this life to prepare for eternity. We are given this life to glorify God. And yet how many of us just waste this life; spending it only for our own pleasures?

"Is what you are living for worth dying for?" ^2^ Are you using this life to prepare for eternity? Or are you wasting it on this world? When you come to death where will you go, heaven or hell? These cares and trivial things of the world will pass away one day; never to return. But the things of God are going to last forever. Are you living for God in this life? Don’t waste this life on yourself. Don’t waste your life…you only have one! “We have all the time after the sunset to rejoice in our victories but we have only until the sunset to win them.” ^3^

Examine yourself…are you ready? You can’t wait until the time has come where you must leave this life. Search yourself today! Are you yet an unbeliever? "Today is the day of salvation!" Seek for Christ…don’t give up till you have found Him. Are you a believer? Is your life evidenced by fruit? Are you living for Christ?

We are living in a dying world. So many people are passing into eternity without even hearing about God. Are you proclaiming the gospel to people? Is it known about you that you are “not after comfort but after souls”? If sinners be damned, at least let them leap to Hell over our bodies. If they will perish, let them perish with our arms about their knees. Let no one go there unwarned and unprayed for.” (Charles Spurgeon). Are you doing all you can to help rescue these dying people or are you just letting them plunge headlong on their way to hell?

Christ Jesus…the Son of God…came and gave Himself up for us to save us from God’s wrath. “Who, though He was in the form of God, did not count equality with God a thing to be grasped, but emptied Himself, by taking the form of a servant, being born in the likeness of men. And being found in human form, He humbled Himself by becoming obedient to the point of death, even death on a cross (Phil. 2:6-8).” Christ sacrificed Himself for us…He made the greatest sacrifice ever possible. Through His sacrifice we can now have peace with God. How can we do any less? We must give ourselves fully for Him. Sacrifice yourself to Him…don’t hold back anything. “Love so amazing so divine, demands my life, my soul, my all.” ^4^

This life is just a handspan in light of eternity. Are you wasting your life or are you pressing on towards the goal? Are you ready for eternity? "Is what you are living for worth dying for?" ^2^

^1^ Thomas Watson
^2^ John Piper
^3^ Richard Baxter
^4^ When I Survey the Wondrous Cross

It's great! (Yes, I did read through the whole thing. I'm just a fast reader. :-) )

…Excellent. Truly amazing, and thought provoking. Well thought out and well written. Very good job. :)

Very well written…good job =) And good message.

@Carissa: That was written very well…you did an excellent job making one think about his eternal state, and presenting hope through the Gospel toward one without hope and without Christ.
And other than a few grammar mistakes - which can easily be corrected - it was great! (You did say to be honest =)

Would you mind pointing out where my grammar mistakes are?

Well, I could be very well wrong; I just saw a few places where it looked like a comma was needed. As I said though, I could be wrong, since that is mainly the only thing I've had trouble with (so I probably am wrong).

Okay. Yeah, I'm not always sure where commas and such should be placed or if thwy should be there…so I probably have errors with that.

All the compliments that the people said earlier.

1. You didn't specify a.m. or p.m. in the first sentence. :)

Oh, thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix that right now.

…wow. Very well written, and give you a lot to think about.

That's really good, Carissa! It's well written.