The Story That Never Ends

I'm here!!!! Poor poor TSTNE….remember it's glory days!!! * weeps and cries with Danielle*

(Those days aren't over.. We can do this!!!! :))

(Sorry I haven't been on here much… :( We've been really busy, and I probably won't be back until after Bible Bee…)

(Sorry I haven't been on here much... :( We've been really busy, and I probably won't be back until after Bible Bee...)

(ditto!)

(@Hannah - is Jimmy gone already?)

(PLEASE DON"T LET THIS THREAD DIE!!!!! I WANT TO FINISH THE BOOK!)

(Patience! Just wait till the Bible Bee Locals are finished! :D)

(Yeah, I know - patience is not one of my strengths!!!! :o And, some of us might have to wait until AFTER Christmas… :O gasp)

(@BBJ13-Yes…jimmy is gone :(!!!! I miss him a lot but anyway he said that he will be on occasionally to write or edit!)

(He didn't understand the full demands of collage yet. :( that's why I said I didn't think he could have time.)

( Well, today is his first day of "real school :P" and he will figure out his schedule…..hopefully he will be on once in a while :)!

Britton is a boss. Just sayin. :)

Huh? Oh…BTW everyone….I am 99% sure that this will pick up after the BB :)! I was working on an addition but got sidetracked with the BB….LONG LIVE TSTNE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lol what part r u planning on adding on cause I was gonna make an addition today?? :)

Well since we only had 1 addition on Melkior I was planning to do one on Melkior….I only have a paragraph though :(…

( ok, that's great!!!! :) I'm gonna work on adding on Lord Arsoth. :))

Ok…Just want to let you know that in my post I was kinda…well…. hoping he would you know…… kinda…..Kill lord Arsoth…..Sorry that was graphic.

So basically in my post there is this whole background story, Figures out where Lord Arsoth is then confronts him with the blade, they fight Lord Arosth dies, and then after all that my post would end and maybe someone could add about him finding that the king had escaped. Sorry that is what me and Jimmy thought but I can change it if you want to do something other then that :)!

(Ok no that sounds great! :) (ok that sounded kinda sick saying killing him sound gr8 facepalmlol) that perfectly fine. :) I'll just start working on another part…. Back at Carivia! :) that's what I really want to do anyway. :) lol)

(lol No that didn't sound weird :)! He is the bad guy :)…if we counted all the guys we killed off during this book THAT would make me sick :(!)

(Well this is war soooooo…..)

( I know but we are gruesome writers :(! JK LOL :)!…..)

(LOL! Yeah it's kinda dark but there is alway that ray of hope in the distance. :))

(<blockquote>(LOL! Yeah it's kinda dark but there is alway that ray of hope in the distance. :))</blockquote>

How poetical :P! Yes indeed there is…..)

( wow I'm a poet and I didn't even know it! :) lol JK)

( wow I'm a poet and I didn't even know it! :) lol JK)

(She is a poet! And I didn't even know it!!!!!!!! :P! lol :)…)

(LOLLOLLOL :))

(This my addition. It will come after the addition with Arsoth and Melkior. :) feel free to critique. :))

In the chaos of the events Katherine had been forgotten. She stood in horror as she watched her best friend in the whole world jump over the courtyard wall to his almost certain death. Her first impulse was to scream his name and run to the edge but she knew it would be pointless.
Tears welled up in her eyes. She knew her mission to find Quinn and Rowan was hopeless. She had searched as far as she could. Where ever they might be they where in the hands of the Almighty now. All she could do was find William and Lady Arwen. She had to face them and tell them she had failed. She glanced around and moved silently towards the direction in which her and Britten had entered the castle. There were no guard's in sight and Lord Trauis was now focused on Britton's demise. as she slipped away she said a prayer for Britton and the Garrison and Gradlem. she walked until she came to the hole In the wall they had come in through. She ran her hand down the uneven surface and tears poured down her face. She headed carelessly towards where she had left William and the party of nobles with him. She couldn't stop thinking about Britten and the chaos in the courtyard, she knew she was getting closer to where she left them when she spotted something on a tree.
"It's William's handwriting…..Lier's lair." She spoke aloud.
Her heart raced. something must have happened; with renewed urgency she ran further into the woods.

Great addition!!

( Woah….That is an awesome addition but SHE JUST LET BRITTEN DIE?!?!?!?!?!!!!!!! but maybe could you expand more on that :)! Sorry to be critical :(! But I REALLY like the addition :)!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was awesome :)!

(Don't be sorry! Constructive criticism is good! :)
She wasn't really in a position to help him, don't you think? What happened happen, the only things she could have done would have been to run down into the courtyard which most likely would have gotten both of them killed. Plus she doesn't have a weapon. :)
How do u think I should edit my post? :) maybe to make this clearer or do u think it's ok??
And of course Britton isn't really dead…… )

( Well…I actually think he should die…I know, I know….But it would make the story good. He died for a noble cause, Kathryn weeping bitterly dramatic stuff dramatic stuff….. :)! Yes I am weird :)! I think you should expand more on what the people at the scene of the fall did or how they acted…Oh! Before I go on I just had a BRILLIANT idea :)! Jimmy has always known the best on how to edit (Well my personal opinion :)!) So, he had only one class today so he is bored (Talked to him today :)!) so I will send him your post and HE can edit it :)!!!!!!!!!!!!! But only if you want me to do that…… I am not a mastermind :P! He is way better at being a mastermind :P!

(Britton is not dying. I'll pay u money to keep him alive if I have to. Evron is dead.
That sounds gr8 if u could send it to Jimmy and ask for his suggestions… Or I could try to edit it myself. :P lol yeah you should probably ask him. :)
Oh and me and my brother had an idea for the Britton jumping of the wall thing, what if someone prays over him after and he is healed? Like king Archen?)

(Britton is not dying. I'll pay u money to keep him alive if I have to. Evron is dead. That sounds gr8 if u could send it to Jimmy and ask for his suggestions... Or I could try to edit it myself. :P lol yeah you should probably ask him. :) Oh and me and my brother had an idea for the Britton jumping of the wall thing, what if someone prays over him after and he is healed? Like king Archen?)

( 50 bucks. JK :)!!!!!!!! I like that pray over Britton Idea :)! I will send it to Jimmy ASAP :)! Hopefully he will answer either today or tomorrow :)!

(Lol
Ok!! :) that way it will be more realistic like he's really hurt but God heals him, cause he can. : ) lol)

Yes that would be dramatic but you CAN'T let Britton die!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

(Hi, Danielle! Great post! I did have a few comments I would like to make, if that is all right. :) First, I am not quite sure why Kathryn would be so certain as to the fate of Sir Quinn and Rowan. They could still be alive, but in an unknown location. Of course, their chances of survival would be slim, but I think she would have still kept up some hope. Here's an idea you might want to consider (of course, we could add it into the editing process): After Kathryn gets off the wall, she hear Sir Denvoir's soldiers coming. She perhaps overhears soldiers reporting to one of their captains that they searched the dungeons, and no enemy remained. They could say that all they found was a body of one of the Order. They could describe it, and Kathryn would know that Sir Quinn was dead (that might stop any confusion among the readers that Sir Quinn might still be alive). It might be complicated, but I wanted to know what you all think? :)

First, I am pretty sure that Kathryn would not have been able to get away so easily. If you remember, Lord Traius did not want to give up his fortified position at the moment (while the enemy still had momentum) so he had stayed on the wall. Understandably, there would have been guards at the exits to stop any who would have tried to escape. I would expand your post here to show more clearly how she got out.

Finally, I believe that Kathryn's journey through the mountain pass and all the way to the burned village and the tree takes too short of a time. If you remember, the reason the tunnel was built was so that the blacksmiths could avoid robbers and to save hours of time tunneling around the mountains. It would have taken Kathryn several hours to accomplish the journey. If you want, perhaps we could draw out that part a little longer (We would also have to explain why she isn't captured by robbers).

Oh, and one last thing. I think we need to bring Ronan a little more into the story. Here is an idea (I don't want to make it too long): How about Kathryn gets captured by robbers of the Council (who still don't know of Lord Traius's invasion) – at least for a time – and is held captive for a purpose I can't think of right now. Meanwhile (the next day, that is, for Ronan, but the same day for Lady Arwen (our sense of time in the story is a bit confusing), Lady Arwen gets nervous about Britton and Kathryn. She decides to overturn her plan and send Rowan off to find them (he volunteers). He then rescues Kathryn, learns of Britton's misfortune, tells Kathryn to go to Liar's Lair, goes to find Britton (who by this time is either recovering or in prison), rescues him, defeats Lord Traius (and perhaps is able to take back the whole castle of Carivia by a stroke of genius even greater than Lord Traius'), and then meets up with the other nobles in the South. That could end the story (but we would still need to determine what happened to Lord Arsoth, Lord Melkior, and the members of the Order who fell into the Council's trap. What do you all think? :)

Wow! I am sorry if that went from advice to a whole idea of how the story ends. :) Anyway, I wanted to know what you all thought? It's good to be back. :) )

(Hi, good to see you again! :) :)

(Good to see you too. :) )

(Having her get kidnapped is a cool idea! :) I might post on that. Hope it's going good at college!)

(That's what I thought. Still, I can help but feel that Kathryn is having one of the worst days in history. :) She discovers her cousin is trapped, she can't find Ronan and Sir Quinn to fulfill her mission, she gets captured by the Council, she is struck in the face, she watches her best friend fall to his death, she hikes through a treacherous mountain pass, and she gets kidnapped by robbers. Kathryn either has a VERY active schedule or she is simply having a not-so-great day. :)

Thanks! College is going wonderfully. :) )

( LOL! To true! Would not want to be her! Poor Kathryn :(!…..)

(I was have a grand idea and would like everyones opinions :) here is my brief skeleton for how this book should finish up. Me and brother just thought this up now so... :) still it's pretty awesome. :) In the confusion Kathryn goes out and sees Williams message; goes to liars lair tell them what's goin on; lady Arwen gives her her horse and she rides on toward wear the kings is; Lady Arwen's party goes to Carivia (Rowan kills lord Traius?? just an idea :)) Kathryn runs into the party that escaped from the cave; tells them what's going on they arrive near the end of the conflict at Carivia. it ends with Britten alive king Archen and Rowan united Rowan knows he's the prince Lord Arsorth is dead lord Traius is dead and all his men. What's left of the Garrison and ex-convicts r for the Rebels; but the concil still lives and it regrouping. Room for a sequel. *evil grin* lol :) what do ya'll think?)

(Hi, Danielle! Great post! I did have a few comments I would like to make, if that is all right. :) First, I am not quite sure why Kathryn would be so certain as to the fate of Sir Quinn and Rowan. They could still be alive, but in an unknown location. Of course, their chances of survival would be slim, but I think she would have still kept up some hope. Here's an idea you might want to consider (of course, we could add it into the editing process): After Kathryn gets off the wall, she hear Sir Denvoir's soldiers coming. She perhaps overhears soldiers reporting to one of their captains that they searched the dungeons, and no enemy remained. They could say that all they found was a body of one of the Order. They could describe it, and Kathryn would know that Sir Quinn was dead (that might stop any confusion among the readers that Sir Quinn might still be alive). It might be complicated, but I wanted to know what you all think? :) First, I am pretty sure that Kathryn would not have been able to get away so easily. If you remember, Lord Traius did not want to give up his fortified position at the moment (while the enemy still had momentum) so he had stayed on the wall. Understandably, there would have been guards at the exits to stop any who would have tried to escape. I would expand your post here to show more clearly how she got out. Finally, I believe that Kathryn's journey through the mountain pass and all the way to the burned village and the tree takes too short of a time. If you remember, the reason the tunnel was built was so that the blacksmiths could avoid robbers and to save hours of time tunneling around the mountains. It would have taken Kathryn several hours to accomplish the journey. If you want, perhaps we could draw out that part a little longer (We would also have to explain why she isn't captured by robbers). Oh, and one last thing. I think we need to bring Ronan a little more into the story. Here is an idea (I don't want to make it too long): How about Kathryn gets captured by robbers of the Council (who still don't know of Lord Traius's invasion) -- at least for a time -- and is held captive for a purpose I can't think of right now. Meanwhile (the next day, that is, for Ronan, but the same day for Lady Arwen (our sense of time in the story is a bit confusing), Lady Arwen gets nervous about Britton and Kathryn. She decides to overturn her plan and send Rowan off to find them (he volunteers). He then rescues Kathryn, learns of Britton's misfortune, tells Kathryn to go to Liar's Lair, goes to find Britton (who by this time is either recovering or in prison), rescues him, defeats Lord Traius (and perhaps is able to take back the whole castle of Carivia by a stroke of genius even greater than Lord Traius'), and then meets up with the other nobles in the South. That could end the story (but we would still need to determine what happened to Lord Arsoth, Lord Melkior, and the members of the Order who fell into the Council's trap. What do you all think? :) Wow! I am sorry if that went from advice to a whole idea of how the story ends. :) Anyway, I wanted to know what you all thought? It's good to be back. :) )

Hi Jimmy! It's gr8 to c u back! :)
Hmmm that does complicate things a bit. I was thinking it wouldn't be guarded because a. All Lord Drakian's guards r in the courtyard. And b. lord Trauis' 4 guys ran down to kill Britton.
That matter of time however does complicate thing a lot. I have a question though if they had to go through the forest of robbers how did She get to the castle from Lady Arwen in the first place???
Just a few though I gtg now..

I TTLY agree we need to bring Ronan into it. Original I was thinking that Katheyn went to Lier's lair and told them what was happening and they went to the confict there… But the time difference it to much, unless we did some editing… What do u think? We def r gonna need to edit timing etc. when we go back 2 edit. :)

Hey all, I'm back again. No more Bible Bee studying, but now I've got work and school, so I still won't be here as much as I was during the beginning of the summer. But I will be making a few additions now, the first of which will come fairly soon. Hopefully.

Anyway, this story is looking like it's going to turn out a lot longer than we previously thought! But this is perfectly fine, I think; we don't have a time limit that I'm aware of, and it doesn't really matter how long the book becomes, as long as it doesn't become boring. In any case, though, we need to get started on making more additions than we have been making in the past few weeks. :)

I hope an addition from me will be coming soon. I just have to get a better grip on the plot so far, and come up with something to keep it going. Hopefully that won't take too long. :)

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Hmmm that does complicate things a bit. I was thinking it wouldn't be guarded because a. All Lord Drakian's guards r in the courtyard. And b. lord Trauis' 4 guys ran down to kill Britton.
That matter of time however does complicate thing a lot. I have a question though if they had to go through the forest of robbers how did She get to the castle from Lady Arwen in the first place????</blockquote>

Umm… why did you quote Jimmy and not do anything else?? :P

I was repeating the questions I asked that no one answered. :)

Oh, whoops! Sorry, I scanned it and thought you were quoting Jimmy. :} I didn't think you would quote yourself… :P

(Since no one been on for awhile..( If it's ok with you Nicolas since you seem to be the only one on here lately. :) lol) I think I'll do some slight edits on my post and we will fix the time problem when we go back and edit. :) so now we can move on and keep adding. :))